What to do there: Create a map of the cemetery as you walk through it. Approach it as if it were a town or a village. Write about what goes on underground. Explore the past (the dead), the present (nature), and the future (this place in 100 years time). Start with the word “dead” and end your piece with the word “life” (or the opposite way round).
Dead.
Having played these haunted nightmares, escaping the world so
slightly,
The moon is full, the wolves emerging, the airs wicks dryly.
The beings that walked on this Earth from before, now cry in their
graves with guilt,
Unheard by man, we put our bouquets in the honor of death but
quickly it starts to wilt.
Eerily, walking along the rusting graves, somehow in a haunting sense
they want to grasp something with their hands,
The crooks of the trees and dying leaves call to the aching lands.
Seeing an image appear at a grave, with a glimpse of a memory at
sight,
Inexplicably, turning away, throwing myself forward, running in
fright.
The more I ran my arms and legs felt heavy, a creature dragging me
into its pit of hell,
Sharp fingers clutching at my ribs, surrounded by its putrid smell.
Somehow, I had freed myself from the monster lurking in the
shadows,
The fog had sprung in the dark, taunting me with the caws of the
unseen black crows.
“Ghost town”, are the words that cross all over these crumbles walls,
It was the poor souls that lost the battle and had taken their fall.
Black hearses sweep across graves in stoned marble and creep with
unsettling silence,
The future’s voice somehow croaks, “chaos” and weeps again to
the world’s unruly defiance.
You can sense the ground shaking, the creature’s awakening.
Dancing around with their nerving and skeletal feet,
They prance around in a circle, creating their own rhythm and
beat.
The graveyard is torn, neglected, never visited by a being but only once,
If the skeletons can thrive underground, then we guess we haven’t
known for months.
Rotting moss and lichen, mark their territories over these
tombstones,
The graveyard echoes with the clattering and rustling of the
skeleton’s bones.
If the bodies of the dead are cast away in coffins and dug to the
ground,
Then the poor souls walk in the mists with despair and an untold
magic bound.
You understand why these voices call to you, in their moments of
strife.
Hunger feeds themselves and reaches for…
Your Life.
lizamkv May 14, 2018
Dearest Zainab,
I thoroughly enjoyed reading your poem! I loved how descriptive you were and the different figurative devices you used. I really adore how you took a different take on a cemetery, usually seen as a peaceful place of reflection and respect, and twisted it so the reader could take a glimpse in the gruesome aspects of it.
In terms of improvement, I would suggest on focusing on 1 or 2 main ideas and prompts because there were times during your poem where I felt a little lost since there was so much going on. This might be a stylistic choice but I felt it took me out of your piece at some points.
Never stop writing!
Love,
Liza
zk123 May 16, 2018 — Post Author
Dear Liza,
Thank you for your lovely comment! And yes, I did feel my poem was a bit of a rush that really did move the idea around. Hopefully, I’ll try to get the main idea to flow more through my future writing pieces and have more advice like yours that will truly bring my pieces more lively and radiant.
Much Love!, Zainab.K